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05/11/13
I will call this Avant-garde. Separate dialog and clarify characters. A little editing will clean up word usage. Interesting take on the topic. Keep writing.
05/11/13
This was clever, concise in content and enjoyable overall. I really enjoyed this. God bless~
This is a charming story. I really like how you portrayed the angels and the humans.

I wanted to know more though, to hear more about what happened before and after. Don't be afraid to explore your characters more. It's better to develop them, then trim out unnecessary information later. I liked the dialog as it helps the reader connect with the MC. Just remember to start a new paragraph each time someone different speaks.

I think you did a nice job of juxtaposing the angels and humans. This story makes the reader stop and think, which is always a good thing. This is a delightful read.