The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story conveys a message in an interesting way and gave me the feeling of being there. Well done.
05/07/13
Interesting story! "Whatsoever a man soweth, that shall he also reap."
This is definitely different than most stories that I read. I really enjoyed your subtle sense of humor and believe God has one as well. You had several little errors that a good proofreader or even spell check would fix like emergency only has one m in it. I didn't think about an IV drip as I tried to come up with a story. I like your fresh take on the topic and am glad the man saw his transgressions. :)
Your unique style kept my attention. I read to the end in hopes that Innocence would find heavenly relief. I gather that you are from Africa? Your story seemed to have some African flair. Good job! Keep writing.