The Official Writing Challenge
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I think you did a lovely job on this piece. I could totally relate with the MC. A name can really mean a lot to a person that can really write on the slate of who they are becoming.

One thing I might suggest is to do some more showing instead of telling. One way to do that is instead of using taglines like she said, instead replace that with narrative lines. For example: "Why would you name me Drip?" He threw his hands in the air and stomped his foot.
Hopefully that shows who is speaking as well as giving a peek into his personality.

I think you did a nice job of bringing the story full circle. It was a delight to read from the very beginning to the end.You did a great job of presenting the topic while still delivering a good message. Good job!
Quite a creative piece. It never occurred to me to personify the topic. You did a good job bring the topic to life (literally). I enjoyed it.
Interesting take on the topic and an enjoyable read. Well done.