The Official Writing Challenge
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11/15/05
Good analogy, and a good story. I enjoyed reading it.
11/15/05
Well said! We were once tarnished, but now we shine like new thanks to our Father:)
11/15/05
Well conceived, a nice story; a few minutes with an editor and this will clean up nicely, sort of like the locket.
Endearing story! I enjoyed reading this!
11/17/05
Very nice! You wrote a good story with a great message. I might develop the character a little more with maybe more thoughts or dialogue..just a thought ..but otherwise..it flowed nicely and was so very clear!!:) Keep writing!
11/17/05
I really like how you used a child-like "voice" to develop your character. Watch your overuse of her name, though. Good story!
11/17/05
Neat glimpse into a teachable moment.