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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Achoo (04/11/13)

TITLE: The Offering
By Taryn Deets
04/13/13


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Achoo, said the wise man
Achoo, said the cow
Achoo, said the cat
The smell of incense was in the air, frank it was
They came from the east
Stars leading
To see
To know Him
Bearing gifts
An offering
Worship
Worship

Achoo, said the shepherd
Achoo, said the mouse
Oh, it tickles
They came full of the light
Had to see this King
Prophesied
Wrapped
Swaddled
So they kneel and
Worship
Worship

Achoo, said the father
Achoo, said the lamb
The scent is heavy
The baby wrapped soft
Loving eyes watching him sleep
The babe, He sneezes
Little fist reaches up to nose
But He misses
Sharp nails scratch an eyelid
Ooh, He hurts and cries
Fatherís hand comforts
They all look and wonder
Worship
Worship

Achoo, itís the mother
The familiar smell
Reminds her
A foreshadow
Even as she loves
A shadow clings to her heart
But His plan
And she Worships
Worships


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Joanne Sher 04/21/13
Such a sweet piece - with a lovely message. Thanks for sharing!
Sunny Loomis 04/24/13
Nice pictures here, and imagining what it might have been like. Good job. Thank you.
Patsy Hallum04/24/13
I liked the play on frankencense. Great piece!
Judith Gayle Smith04/24/13
Beautiful offering . . .
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/26/13
This is lovely.Congratulations on ranking 10th in your level! (The highest rankings can be found on the message boards)