The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/13
An all too common issue with Christians of any age. You handled the topic with grace.

Typically, you don't start a fiction piece with a scripture verse. It tends to preach at the reader, instead of preparing them for a good story that teaches a moral lesson.

Keep writing!
04/17/13
Good take on the topic. Thank you.
04/17/13
You did a really nice job describing the internal conflict the MC was experiencing,in a poetic like fashion. The subject is one many Christians struggle with. I enjoyed the authentic "tone" and the way the story gently worked toward the conclusion.

Very good job here.

God bless~
A very good story - a lesson well learned. Beautiful.
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