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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: "Splash" 4-11-13 Deadline (04/04/13)

TITLE: The Calming of a Soul
By Deborah Sampson
04/11/13


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How many times had Melissa told Andrew he couldn’t keep up on his wild ride of partying and drugs and the alcohol? One of these could turn out bad but all three were setting him up for dropping off a cliff. Andrew needed to wake up before it was too late.

The sad part was that he knew how God felt about all of this, he grew up in a church, and their dad was the pastor. He pretended much of the time he was there. Living two lives, one for his family and one for him, because he did not believe in salvation, about God, and especially about Jesus.

Andrew was good looking. He had good grades, but his passion was for swimming. Floating in the water, gliding through with no effort was relaxing but hearing the little splashes of the water as he swam calmed him. He had received many medals, and his school team had won many meets. Swimming was his life.

The last part of his junior year Maggie Wilder came into the picture, they hit it off and soon the two were hanging everywhere. His sister Melissa told him that Maggie was bad news. Andrew told her to leave him alone; he could make his own decisions.

How wrong was his thinking in this matter, the more they partied, the more involved Andrew and Maggie became in drinking, and trying drugs. The swim meets were on Saturdays. He soon felt the effects, he couldn’t keep up with the team, his head hurt and his concentration was horrible. Today the Coach called him into his office; he knew he was in trouble.

“Andrew, what is your problem? Is it true, the rumors that I hear? That you are drinking, and doing drugs? Before you answer, you know the consequences that will take place.” The Coach was looking directly at him for his answer.

Andrew shrugged his broad shoulders. “Yah, it’s true. So I guess I am off the team? I don’t care.” That couldn’t be farther from the truth, but he wasn’t going to tell his coach that. He got up to leave, “Sorry Coach.”

The Coach just shook his head, “Andrew this is one of the first steps in ruining the rest of your life. I thought with your background with knowing God and living for him you would be one of the last ones to succumb to this. Get your act together, then maybe next year you can come back.”

Andrew just looked at his Coach as he left the room; the words haunted Andrew ‘Get your act together? Knowing God?’ What had he done? His family would have to know about this, and they too would be disappointed.

His family was heartbroken for him, but in the next few weeks, Andrew straightened up his act. He would show his coach and his family he could do this.

Tonight he went to the school to swim, it was strange, that no one was there. The lights were off but he could see. He climbed the eight foot ladder, was about to dive, but instead sat on the edge of the board. He felt he had to clear his mind.

He felt the urgency to talk with God. “Lord, just help me, I need you in my life, forgive me of my sins, and for my careless ways, I have been a total fool for leaving you out of my life, and I am asking you into my heart now. Guide me and show me your ways. Thank you Lord.”

Andrew got up, he was too excited to swim now, he climbed back down. He would head home, he felt so good about what just happened.

The door opened and the janitor walked in, “Hi, Andrew”, he said as he flipped the lights on.

Andrew stared at the pool; there was no water in the pool. The shock just about made him faint; he had just about jumped from the ladder just minutes before he talked to the Lord.

“Sorry, Andrew, we had to drain it, that’s why no one is here, you did see the sign when you came in, right?”

“Eh, Yah I did.” But he hadn’t, but ‘Someone’ had, and he just thanked the Lord.

There would have been no sound of calming splashes tonight, and much worse, he could have died without God. Instead the calming of his soul could be heard within him.


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Emma-Jane McLennan04/11/13
Wow, what an amazing story! My heart skipped a beat when I read your ending with the pool. Very well done. :)
Loni Bowden-Horn04/13/13
I really enjoyed how this story was constructed. The coach was concerned not just about the MC swimming abilities but about his life in Christ and his need for redemption.

The ending was a cliffhanger. It demonstrates that we don't always see things the way God does if we just jump ahead without His direction.

Well written piece.
Judith Gayle Smith04/17/13
What a story! Well written, suspenseful and soul-satisfying.
CD Swanson 04/17/13
This was quite the tale, it was riveting, and pulled me in right away, all the way to the nail biting ending.

Great job. God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/18/13
Congratulations on ranking 9th in level one! (The highest rankings can be found in the message boards)