The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/13
I really enjoyed how this story was constructed. The coach was concerned not just about the MC swimming abilities but about his life in Christ and his need for redemption.

The ending was a cliffhanger. It demonstrates that we don't always see things the way God does if we just jump ahead without His direction.

Well written piece.
What a story! Well written, suspenseful and soul-satisfying.
04/17/13
This was quite the tale, it was riveting, and pulled me in right away, all the way to the nail biting ending.

Great job. God bless~
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