The Official Writing Challenge
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03/16/13
Interesting work! I've studied a few different religions and it's amazing the lengths they go through because they think it will bring them salvation/nirvana, or whatever else they want to call it.

At first, I was shocked into reading more. The narrative flowed from topic to topic smoothly, and I felt pulled along on the journey.

The title is very fitting!

As a Christian, it gives me pause and a greater appreciation for my Savior.

But I see a lot of potential for this story becoming more evangelistic as well.

The only recommendation I would give on this is to add more about Jesus. As an unbeliever, I would be left with a few questions...

"Why was He carrying a cross?
Whose sin was He carrying it for if it wasn't His own?
Why are you set free just because He was spat upon and crucified?"

I really enjoyed reading this. I'm excited to see what else you have in store for us. Great job!!!
03/17/13
Great job...I enjoyed this entirely.

God Bless~
Interesting and very informative. I appreciate the glimpse into another culture. This is so well written.