The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/13
This is cute.

This seemed to read more like prose than a poem, and I think you would have been fine using regular paragraphs.

Nice job on this. Cute!
03/10/13
Loved it! Such an honest, sweet, simple expression of marriage. Good word pictures, too - I could see you both.
This is really different-in a good way. Though it had a poetic format to it, I could see it unfolding like a story. You have a delightful sense of humor. I'd love to see what you would do with satirical piece. I think that is your niche. You have a wonderful way of opening your heart to the reader. I enjoyed this.