The Official Writing Challenge
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03/08/13
You make some interesting connections here that I hadn't though of before.

The topic felt a bit weak to me. I would have brought it out a bit more.

Nice job. Keep writing.
I found this a fascinating dissertation. I think you did a great job of explaining your thoughts and expressing them to the reader. I did notice the warning at the end of the story, if you truly do not want younger kids to read this, you may want to consider putting a warning like that at the very beginning. Your words made me stop and think. For me that is always a good thing. I find my faith is strengthened when I ask questions. God , however, always provides my answer, but not always in the way I might want. Good job.