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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Tie (02/28/13)

TITLE: It's Not Over
By Richard Hicks
03/06/13


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The lightning crashed against the midnight sky making it appear as day. The warning sirens were going off in the distance. James sat in a chair upon the front porch as the rain fell from the sky. It seemed to fall like rain being poured out in buckets. He was not afraid of the storm. He found it intriguing.

He set alone in cold silence, mesmerized by both the beauty and yet the danger of the storm. His mind drifted back to a much better time in his life. He could remember the laughter, the peace; the heartwarming times where he used to have a song in his heart. Now, he only had faded memories of family get-togethers.

“God, is this a time in my life where You are setting me aside to teach my some things? If this is the case, why am I so miserable and lonely?”

James got up to shake away the thoughts. He stood there for a minute, and then walked back into the house. He had turned off all the lights to watch the storm. Tonight He even turned off the computer. Suddenly, the phone rang. He had grown accustomed to not answering his phone because of his mom’s repeated calls.

James heard his dad’s voice speaking over the answering machine. “Son, please, this is your dad, please pick up your phone. The tornado has hit our home. Could you come over here as soon as you can?”

James’s heart raced as He picked up the phone, “Is mom okay?”

Dad’s voice quivered as he said, “No son, she had to be rushed to the hospital.”

After talking to his dad, he knew what he had to do. He got in his truck and took off in that direction. As He got closer to the neighborhood, He saw the disaster. Some houses were ripped in half and some completely decimated. Still others were standing there like nothing had even happened.

Then he came upon the home that He had lived in as a child. His heart sank as He saw his dad with a group of neighbors gathered around the rubble.

“Dad!” shouted James, as he jumped out of truck.

“I’m here son. I just got a report from the doctor. You mom is going to be alright, she is asking for you.”

The two hurried into the truck and headed to the hospital. Once there, they inquired about her room number, slipped into the elevator, and found the room.

James let dad lead the conversation, he stood there quietly.

Finally James’s mom spoke up. “James I have something very important I want to say to you. I have not been the most supportive and understanding mother at certain times in your life. I wasn’t there when you needed me the most; but I am here for you now. I want you to know that I love you. You will always be my son. I am sorry that I pushed you away with my words.”

James answered, “I know I said I was cutting all ties with the family. But when I saw how the tornado had ripped apart the home I grew up in, I realized then, just how important you both are to me.”

Dad clearing his throat spoke humbly, “God never intended for our family to separate. But He has brought us together for such an important lesson; for He has tied our family together with cords that cannot be broken.”

Mother and son apologized that night, and their family has a fresh beginning. No matter what happens always remember we are woven and crafted by God’s awesome hand. He has put us in families, and ties us strongly together in love.

Sometimes, what seems to be for our destruction, God turns into a wonderful place of restoration. We have a new hope, a new beginning in Jesus. He can turn around a hopeless situation. He will change a person’s heart. There can be a new beginning for any relationship as long as there is love.


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Alicia Renkema03/08/13
I loved your description of the rain coming down in buckets and the night sky flashing with lightning making it appear as day. But the two things I liked the most about this story were the transparency of the MC all the way through the piece, letting us in on his inner most thoughts. He had hurt and frustration over a family situation but in the end his heart was submissive to the Lord; soft and tender. I love the theme of redemption and restoration here. Our God loves to tie up the loose ends in our lives and work things out together for good when we allow Him to do so. Your story was a perfect fit for the topic and it made me want to pray for reconciliation for any currently unrestored relationship that I know of. Great devotional at the end. Superb writing over all.
Cheryl Harrison 03/09/13
I liked your descriptions of the storm. It paralleled the emotional storm your MC was struggling with. Sorry it took a tornado to bring the family back together, but happy God used it for their good. Good job! Keep writing.
Phee Paradise 03/09/13
Your descriptions not only brought the scene to life, but also brought the MC's emotions to life. It's so true the tragedy often brings families back together, but I was curious about what had driven them apart.
Virgil Youngblood 03/09/13
The ending of the story game meaning to the title. You have reminded us of the importance of relationships, and the value of maintaining them.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/10/13
I think this is a stunning piece. From the storms rumbling to the MC's hurting heart you had me totally invested in each character. The only suggestion I might give would be I wanted to read more. I long to know why he was ignoring his mother's calls and what had happened yo put such a horrible rift between mother and son. Wanting to read more of the story is a compliment. I think you could turn this into something much bigger perhaps a novel or perhaps a longer short story. You did a great job on us this. Thank you for sharing.
Danielle King 03/10/13
I like happy endings. You took me on a journey, wondering what went wrong, whose fault it was, and all the while developing your story to bring it to a satisfying ending. Great job.
Noel Mitaxa 03/11/13
Very descriptive and absorbing work, which shows real potential for you to open up your characters and invite your readers into their thoughts. Well done.
Judith Gayle Smith03/13/13
Such descriptions! I could feel the storm that had built in your MC's heart as well as your MC's parents. Coming to grips with our differences and choices - you wrote this so well, the reuniting was totally believable.
Bea Edwards 03/13/13
Good story of restoration and healing. I liked your description of mom taking responsibility for being human. Well done.