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Love the way you packed this piece with vivid descriptions and word pictures. I was drawn in enough to wonder "What about Ramon?" I would encourage you to leave some white space between your paragraphs - it makes for an easier read. Great job.
The title perked my curiosity and the story was delightful. I wish I was there to sample the bounty you described so clearly. I agree with the comment about adding space between the paragraphs, to make for easier reading. Well done.
Leave the bran muffins for dining at home! What a superb feast of descriptions! This was absorbing. Great job!

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03/05/13
Nicely done! Good job with the topic which was spot on.
God bless~
This was a delightful read. You had me smiling throughout and chuckling at your subtle yet perfectly timed humor. The last paragraph was a great ending, leaving the reader something to chew on. (I know it was a bit corny but because of your delightful descriptions I'm also a bit hungry too.) Nicely done on this well-written piece.
Thank you for glorifying God with your true, honest, just, pure, lovely, good, virtuous and praiseworthy winning entry! God bless you.

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Thank you for glorifying God with your true, honest, just, pure, lovely, good, virtuous and praiseworthy winning entry! God bless you.

Love and verbal hugs, Judi

KJV Revelation 14:12 "Here is the patience of the saints: here are they that keep the commandments of God, and the faith of Jesus."
Congratulations for placing 2nd in your level and 22 overall! The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.
Fabulous descriptions with all of the different types of people there; you had my curiosity piqued as to all that was going on right along with your MC's. I m a big foodie too so my mouth was watering while reading. Congratulations on your second place win and 22nd place over all. Found out about this piece through the brick section, glad you threw one late. Welcome!
03/08/13
Congrats! God bless~
Congrats! God bless you.
Congrats on your coming second! God bless you.