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Such a sweet, totally believable story. I enjoyed this so much. Thank you.

A wee hint - study paragraphing to make your entries more readable.

You did a terrific job!

Loving you in through and because of Jesus, the Christ . . .

Have you "thrown a brick"?

Hi...I really enjoyed this whole thing. You did a wonderful job with this entry, and presented the topic in a creative way.
Thank you.

God bless~
This is a delightful story. I think you did a great job of introducing the characters. i fell in love with both little girls.

I only have a couple of tiny suggestions. remember to start a new paragraph each time someone different speaks, even if it's just one word. You may want to double space them to give the reader white space. The other thing is accent in the way you used it doesn't seem right coming from a 6 or 7 yo.Perhaps she could have said Mommy says God is the perfect accent to our life. Then the other girl could have crinkled her brow and said "What's that mean?"

But those are tiny details. You really nailed the topic and did it in a fun and interesting way. I think you built up the suspense with the "missing" daddy and is just perfect for kids. Children's stories is my favorite genre both to read and to write. You did a grand job on this charming story and it will delight both child and adult.