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This is an interesting piece. I liked the double take on the note. The one who left a note got in trouble but the real "culprit" didn't think to leave the note.

There are several punctuation errors. You may want to invest in a good punctuation book or website.

The ending seemed a bit too simple and wrapped up too readily, though like I said about the irony, it makes one stop and really think. Good job,
Your story kept my attention. You drew out my emotions with your characters. I was upset that Loye was falsely accused. Glad to see your story had a happy ending. Good job! Keep writing.