The Official Writing Challenge
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I think you did a great job of building the suspense. My heart hurt for the young MC. I'm terrible at reading titles, and it wasn't until I read the title that it tied the topic together. I really enjoyed the ending with the subtle hint that you knew the MC quite well. Nicely done.
02/19/13
I felt this piece and it touched my heart. Nicely done. God bless~
02/21/13
Congrats. God bless~
Congratulations for placing 4th in your level and 31 overall!
02/24/13
You wrote~
"The note sang by the mouth was simply at the same pitch, tempo and intensity as the tune carried in the heart. To sing softer notes one needs a softer heart."
Ahh such sweet profundity! I'll be pondering the haunting way you crafted those two lines for a long bit!