The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed every word of this thrilling story. You drew me in the right away. I noticed a couple of places where you seem to contradict yourself. One example is the line: In the blinding rain she could see. I know I'm nitpicking, but it did cause me to stumble and interrupted the flow. I really enjoyed your characters. They seemed real and the dialogue felt natural. I think your take on the topic was original and interesting. It's a version of how paying it forward can make a difference, not only in others but in our own lives as well. You did a great job with this. I enjoyed it from the beginning to the end.
02/02/13
Wow - This was an excellent piece of story telling! It held my focus and attention from the fist word to the very last one. Thank you for this. You won't be in this level for much longer.

God bless~
Lovely. Thank you for prompting me with a similar memory long forgotten.
Congratulations on ranking 10th in level one!
02/10/13
Theme so nicely portrayed in this unique story and propelled forward nicely with good use of dialogue. Thank you.