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This is a really intense story. I think you did a fantastic job of covering the topic while still delivering a great message.

My only suggestion might be to add a little bit of action in between the dialogue. This can help the reader understand where the character is coming from as well as identify the person speaking. For example: "Forgiveness?" The daughter twirled her hair with her finger while she nibbled on her bottom lip. Hopefully something like that will show you what I mean and that the daughter feels guilty which is why she is performing nervous tendencies like biting her lip.

Overall I think you did a great job with this painful subject. You covered the topic in a fresh way. The ending brought the story full circle.
02/02/13
This made me well up and brought a vitally important message in the interim. Nicely done, and you did a phenomenal job with a very sad subject. Yet it was presented in a way that offered hope. Good work!

God bless~
02/02/13
Dementia brings about such conflicting emotions to the family who finds themselves in the position of caring for or watching those they love slowly slip away. This story paints an accurate picture of the frustration and even irritation that can sometimes occur. It then follows by describing the shame that is felt for expecting the loved one to 'just' remember and to just be who they used to be. It is so sad, but in these situations to love means that we must now live in our loved one's reality. I smiled when, at the end of the story, I could feel the change in the daughter's attitude. It reminded me of some repeat conversations that I had with my grandma. We were living in her world, sometimes even becoming different people.
This is an important topic and the message is a blessing.
02/02/13
Dementia brings about such conflicting emotions to the family who finds themselves in the position of caring for or watching those they love slowly slip away.
This story paints an accurate picture of the frustration and even irritation that can sometimes occur. It then follows by describing the shame that is felt for expecting the loved one to 'just' remember and to 'just' be who they used to be. It is so sad, but in these situations to love means that we must now live in our loved one's reality.
I smiled when, at the end of the story, I could feel the change in the daughter's attitude. It reminded me of some repeat conversations that I had with my grandma. We were living in her world, and sometimes when necessary, even becoming the people she believed us to be.
This is an important topic and the message is a blessing.
02/09/13
This is a poignant and moving story. It is often difficult for a family to deal with dementia.

It often reminds us that forgiveness is the key to restoring any relationship.

Congratulations on your third place ribbon.
02/10/13
Clever use of dialogue to bring attention to a painful topic.