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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Rest (01/17/13)

By Olawale Ogunsola


The rapid growth of Total Electronics started with Sam Bee as one of their brightest young prospects.

He had caught the eye of the Board of Directors by transforming one of their most difficult customers into an enthusiastic supporter. For Sam had taken only a few hours to solve a problem that threatened to shut their operations down for at least a week.

From then on, everyone dubbed him "Engineer Ant" and as a result of this, he became Director of Technical Services.

The new post meant more responsibilities and he could not afford to fail because his mobile phone rarely stopped ringing.

His closing time changed, if he had any, now.

The promotion turned out to become the sun that scorched love out of his marriage for is wife, Bose, became so resentful of his late arrivals that she was uncomfortable with the new no-scheduled-time work.

This graduated into nagging which in turn ended in serious protests culminating in her refusal to prepare him food as she used to.

As busy as he was, he also started a part-time post-graduate studies, in his chosen profession which drained the little time he have had to spend with his family.

One day, he closed from working in a client's company, one hundred and fifty kilometers away along very rough roads.

He left his office as soon as he arrived to attend a lecture slated for that day.

After this, he drove home.

He pulled up the car in the park. He took a few items and held them to his chest, looking pale and exhausted headed to the house, into the waiting hand of his clamorous wife who welcomed him with her stock in trade: nagging and demonstration.

He slowly made his way through the front door, clutching a take-away meal he had bought.

He placed it on the table and went into the livingroom.

He went through the living room to have a warm bath, as he slurred a response to his wife's complaints.

After his bath, he was speechless to find that she had eaten his meal, but he quietly cooked a little rice for himself.

When it was ready, he was about to take it from the kitchen to the dinning room when he suddenly collapsed.

His wife, Bose, hearing him fall, ran to the scene, where she saw him gasping for breath.

He was dying!

Then she cried out,
"I have killed my husband!"
to alert other neighbors.

Neighbors came running in, including a Medical Doctor. He rescued him, with the help of a Federal Hospital staff Nurse present, by taking him to his Medical center in his own car; where they both saved his life.

Bose was not allowed to go with them.

Some people stayed to console her as a widow.

The following morning, when his Manager noticed he was not in his office, he was troubled because he was never a truant. A driver and another senior staff was dispatched to his house only to be informed that he was dead.

As they were wondering what to do, a person arrived from the clinic at the office to inform the Manager that Sam Bee was alive.

The man was delighted to hear this and visited him personally in the hospital, hoping to see Sam.

The Doctor clucked his tongue and said, as he shook his head,
"Your Engineer Ant has overworked himself and he needed to stay in the clinic for thirty days. He needed a serene environment where nobody will be disturbing him. Only his wife may visit."

The Manager replied, "Even if he needed more time, it would be given."

In Sam's hospital room, Bose said to him,
"My dear, I'm very sorry to cause this mess."
"No, honey! I am sorry that I ignited the fire by working too hard and burning out our love life."
"I contributed to it also." she replied, planting a kiss on his lips.

After thirty days, Sam Bee had fully recovered, radiant and beaming with smiles. It was not because of administration of drugs or injections but because he stayed away from being too busy and freed from emotional torture.

On the day he left the clinic, the Manager instructed that he proceeded on a two-month leave on an Island resort together with his wife.

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Phee Paradise 01/25/13
I like the style of your story. It reads like a parable with a good message but no preaching. I felt the second half was better than the first half because it was more immediate and the dialogue brought the characters to life. I especially like the part about his wife eating his supper and the line about her being consoled as a widow was excellent.
Bonnie Bowden 01/25/13
The title drew me right in. It was a wonderful modern day parable.
C D Swanson 01/26/13
This was so clever and entertaining. I loved the style, the tone, and the entire piece.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/27/13
This is an interesting story. You do a nice job of building the suspense and showing the reader the MC's personality. One thing I might suggest would be to start off with the wife yelling I killed my husband!" That would grab the reader right away. I think you did a nice job of writing on topic and resolving the conflict in the end. Nice job.