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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Rest (01/17/13)

TITLE: The Old Familiar Friend
By donna baumgartner
01/21/13


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The Old Familiar Friend



Ever since I can remember you have been there, a ďgo toĒ if you will. I first learned about you in my room when I would hear her footsteps coming down the hall. Crazy how someone so small can make such a commanding sound stomping down a hallway.

She taught me about you. She knew you so well, I suspect it was ever since she could remember as well. She knew you so well that she would sit up at night with you. I could sense her out there, feel the weight of you in the air.

Whenever I would forget about you for a minute, the feeling of you leaving my chest, she would remind me. She could sense when I wasnít paying attention to you. I wasnít giving you the attention you deserved. She didnít understand how anyone could do this. She was diligent in her attention to you and she resented when I didnít do the same. She always brought me back, faithfully.

When it came time to leave, you came with me. I guess I wasnít really all that surprised. She had taught me well, for a very long time. It didnít matter what I was doing or thinking, you would find your way back to me. An old familiar friend.

What a powerful and persistent companion you are! Always there to remind me of what could happen. Bringing me captive to your ways.

I didnít even really know what your name was until a short time ago, you were such a part of me I didnít even know you had a separate name! I thought we were one and the same!

Funny thing is, someone else told me what your name was. He also told me I didnít need you anymore. He said your name is Fear. I couldnít believe that! All this time! What would I do without you! He said I could give you to Him and He would give me rest.
Rest


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Joanne Sher 01/26/13
This is masterfully written, beautiful, and extremely poignant. Perfect for the topic, and soothing to my soul. THANK you!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/26/13
Wow what a powerful story. You did an excellent job of developing the conflict right away. It drew me in and made me want to keep reading right to the very end. I will admit that I did not think that fear was the MC's companion. It doesn't happen very often that I get surprised by the ending so it is a real treat when I do. This was a delightful read.
Virgil Youngblood 01/27/13
Ahhh, the ending surprised me, and I think that was due in part to the title. I would not think of fear as a friend. The conclusion tied in in well to the challenge theme. Good job.
Michelle Knoll 01/28/13
Wow, you kept me guessing until the end about who the "friend" was! Nice work!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/31/13
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level one! (The top 40 overall and the top 13 in level one can be found on the message boards under the Heading the Writing Challenge)
donna baumgartner01/31/13
I just want to thank all of you for your kind comments. This was my 1st attempt at writing and your encouragement is such a blessing to me!
Donna