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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Measure (01/10/13)

TITLE: Size Seven
By clarissa aguilera
01/15/13


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You know Cindy your mother was thinking about losing some weight; do you think she’s got what it takes to keep a commitment? “I don’t know, mother… replied Cindy”. What did you have in mind? Well I have wanted to get into those really cute jeans; I bought me a couple years back, that you’ve wanted me to get rid of, remember?

“Those are like a size seven, mom?” Cindy smirks as she raised her eyebrows, giggling. “You don’t think I got what it takes in keeping my word”, replied Diana?

Mom, you’re like a size eleven, maybe a twelve, that’s going to take some sacrificing, said Cindy.

You’re a little plumy mother, “well thanks for the encouraging words”, Diana whispered, as she smiles.

You’re going to have to change, your whole diet. "I don’t think you got what it takes to measure up mother". The way you like to go out to eat, hamburgers and French fries, which are your favorite and those crispy cream donuts.

“I’m serious Cindy; I really want to fit into those jeans. I have a faith in myself. (LUKE 17:6) NIV He replied, “If you have faith as small as a mustard seed, you can say to this mulberry tree, “Be uprooted and planted in the sea, and it will obey you. “I was thinking about working out, said mother, Diana.

So were taking a daily work out, mom? “Yes”, Diana stated. When do you plan on starting this commitment mother?

“Tomorrow”, said Diana.

“Tomorrow” are you sure?

“Yes” Diana replied.

Tomorrow I get paid mother and I was thinking about treating you to Mc Donald’s. What’s tomorrow? Saturday, “Big Mac and fries”, Cindy giggles.

Sounds very tempting, with a smile, said Diana.

Mother you’re already giving in and you haven’t even started your commitment yet.

Measure up, mom?

You’re right Cindy; don’t feed into the trial or temptation (JAMES 1:12) NIV blessed is the man who perseveres under trial, because when he has stood the test, he will receive the crown of life that God has promised to those who love him.

If you really want to lose weight mom, I’m ready to support you (100%) mother. If it makes you happy, stay true to yourself and do what is right for you, (EPHESIANS 6:14) NIV Stand firm then, with the belt of truth buckled around your waist, with the breast plate of righteousness in place, and with your feet fitted with the readiness that comes from the gospel of peace.

I’ll pick you up tomorrow, for what Cindy, asked Diana?

We’re going out for a chief salad. With a big smile, Cindy winks her eye.


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Bonnie Bowden01/17/13
Those New Year's Resolutions are bound to be broken. Fun take on the topic. I think you might have meant chef salad and not chief salad at the end of your story.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/18/13
This is a great story between a mother and daughter. I found myself smiling at the banter.

It was really hard to figure out who was speaking because you didn't always use quotation marks or start a new paragraph when someone different speaks. A good challenge buddy will help you catch those things. Feel free to PM me if you need any help.

I liked your story. I think the idea of weight loss was a clever take on the topic. I also liked the ending. It was nice to see the daughter be encouraging. I also think your verses you selected were a great fit.
Colin Swann01/21/13
Oh dear, I would hope Dians does better than me at the slimming lark. An amusing and meaningful dialogue between mother and daughter. Well done!

If you go to the forum's 'Chuck a Brick' for this topic, you well get additional feedback.

Colin (Gold Membership)
CD Swanson 01/22/13
Smiling...good job.
God bless~
Phee Paradise 01/22/13
I love the interaction between mother and daughter. Your dialogue was realistic, but I also had a problem following it because of the quotation marks. I was also a little confused when you used both mother and Diane at the end or beginning of dialogue. I do like the way they naturally included scripture in their conversation. I think you have a good start at story telling.
Terry R A Eissfeldt 01/23/13
The basics are all here. Seek out some help in editing before you submit your pieces and you'll learn as you go.
Keep on keeping on. God Bless