The Official Writing Challenge
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Good job with this piece. Some very intensely powerful moments. I enjoyed the ending. Nicely done.
God bless~
This is an interesting take on the topic. I smiled at the name Critter-what a perfect fit.

I got a bit confused in the middle. I think smoother transitions might help. Perhaps have someone read it aloud and see if they stumble. If they do you may want to rephrase it.

I think you did a great yet of using the scriptures to emphasize your points. Your message along with your subtle sense of humor made this a delight to read.