The Official Writing Challenge
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This is really lovely. You touched my heart with your words. I can't even begin to imagine how scary it would be to move my family to another place--let alone the Middle East.

I have just a tiny bit of red ink. Try not to mention the challenge in your story as the EC are published in an anthology or the magazine and not all readers will know anything about the challenge. Also when you quote a song or any piece of work make sure it is in the Public Domain and that you cite in a footnote the name and composer of the song.

Overall, I think you did a fantastic job with this story. You covered the topic in a fresh way and you pulled the reader in right away by introducing the conflict of moving to a new place. The ending was perfect and really reinforced your message. I also liked the scripture you used. For me the best part was the prayer. Your words were heartfelt and genuine. There are people who read this who may not know how to pray and your prayer will show how an intimate relationship with God is possible and that he is beside us every step of our journey. Delightful read!
Wow- This was a powerful entry with an equally powerful message.

Thanks. God bless~
I loved this. Congrats!
God bless~
Congrats for placing third. You're moving higher. Write more!