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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Step(s) (11/29/12)

TITLE: Just a Word
By Deborah Sampson
12/04/12


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“Must you always be so dramatic, Kate?” Kris stacked the tea glasses back on the tray. “You always try and start problems whenever you can. Mom and Dave are tired of it!”

“Kris, chill out Dad and Elise are just fine. In fact, after mom died, Dad and I finally recovered and were doing okay, just the two of us. Till Dad fell for your mom. Nothing good came from it.”

Kris had to agree it was not a match made in heaven. She never knew her dad; it had been Mom and herself for years. The fact Kris didn’t like going to church nor did her mother put a rife in the newly created family. Dave was not only an elder but a devout man of God. He made it clear that they all would be going to church together. That was before they were married.

The marriage took place four months ago, and it seemed to get worse as each Sunday approached.

The two step-sisters did not get along, and made it clear that they were not happy.

Good little Kate, she seemed to soak up everything to do with God and church. It would seem that Kate grew up in the church, she sang, taught Children’s’ church, and helped at most of the functions. It was always Kate this or that. Kris was so tired of it. So she didn’t see the need of God in her life, wasn’t that her business. She was seventeen and didn’t need the hassle from everyone.

Kate looked at the clock again, Dad and Elise were not home yet, and very unusual, they always were on time, unless they called.

The ringing of her cell phone interrupted her thoughts, “Hello? Yes this is Kate Reynolds. Yes, Oh my goodness, what hospital did you say? Are they both ok? I see, yes we will be there soon.”

“Kris, come here quick!” Kate’s whole body was shaking.

“What is it, Kate?” I was --- she saw the look on her step-sister’s face. “Tell me, Kate.”

“Dad and your mom was in an accident, they took them to St. Rita’s. They wouldn’t tell me anything about their condition. “Oh Kris, let’s hurry.”

“I’ll drive Kate; you call the rest of the family Ok?”

“That’s good, let’s go.”

It was touch and go for a while for both parents; much prayer went through the hospital that first forty-eight hours. The two step-daughters bonded during this time, pulling on each other’s strengths. Kris watched Kate during this time, and felt the strength she had as she continued to pray for the two. Kris felt a nagging feeling that this whole faith thing was real. One evening Kris knelt at the front in the Hospital chapel, and prayed her own prayer, one that asked the Lord into her life. She thanked Him for the healing power she saw taking place for their parents.

Kris’s mother had a broken leg, rib, and scratches on her arms, her concussion caused her severe headaches, and would for a while.

Kate’s father had a broken arm, broken rib that had punctured his lung, and many contusions and scratches on him also. Both had been unconscious on being brought to the hospital.

Kris talked to her mother a few days after the accident, and found that she too knew how serious they were and if it had been her time to go, she would not have gone to heaven. She hadn’t been around Dave without knowing the choice that must be made by each one. She made that choice this week in the hospital and it felt like a big burden had been lifted from her. She had been given another chance and she took it.

Kris told her mother about her decision also, and how grateful she had been too for mom finding Dave, and the life they had together.

Three weeks later, when Sunday came around, Elise and Kris was up and ready to go, they were excited about their new life.

Dave thanked the Lord for the work He had done, in his wife’s life and his new daughter’s life too.

Kate was smiling as she looked around at her new family. She was so thankful to have Kris as a sister.

Years have gone by; the girls were married and had children of their own now. No two step-sisters had a closer bond between them, and in fact they leave the ‘step’ out of the equation now.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/07/12
I think this is a terrific take on the topic. When I was thinking of ideas for my own story, the step-family never came into my mind. You did a nice job of spotlighting the two girls' relationship.

Something that would make your story even stronger would be to do more showing. This is a great example of showing: Kate’s whole body was shaking. This one is more telling: the two girls made it clear that they were not happy
You could show this by describe what they do perhaps one talks loudly behind the other's back or the snipe at each other over little things all while glaring and crinkling their noses.

Your message comes out loud and clear and is a message that everyone needs to hear. Your ending brought the story full-circle and left me with a warm feeling. Nice job on this piece; it was a delightful read.
CD Swanson 12/10/12
Oh I enjoyed this so much. Thanks. God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/13/12
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