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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Irritated (11/08/12)

TITLE: God Is Good
By clarissa aguilera
11/14/12


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“Mother, there’s only two weeks till Abby’s 1st Birthday; “I have not bought anything for her party."

“Is there even going to be enough time to pass out invitations, decorate, and order the cake?

“I’ve just been so busy working”.

“I want a jolly jumper for the kids, balloons, “I'd like to decorate and I am working for the next “two” weeks.

“I had a long day at work, “I have a headache and I’m getting irritated.

“Maybe it’s just not meant to be?”

Christina, “calm down sweetie, there’s plenty of time “replied Christina’s mother. “I’ll order the cake call for the jolly jumper “today" and you take care of the invitations.

“I’ll do all the cooking.

I’ll make macaroni and potato salad, some chili beans, we’ll have rice, I will make some Kool-Aid. “I’ll run to the store and get us a few cases of sodas, some bottled water, couple bags of chips and dips. I’ll have john cook tri-tip for the older folks and hamburgers, hot dogs for the kids.

On the way home I’ll stop at “party city” get us some balloons, some streamers to decorate the yard. “Get us a pińata; we'll fill it with confetti, candy, and toys for the kids.

“We need tables and chairs, paper cups, napkins, spoons and forks.

“Mother"

“Speaking on John, we’ve been fighting all week; we just can’t seem to agree on anything anymore. “I still love him very much, “but I find myself always irritated when he’s around.

“Christina, come sit down sweetheart. It sounds like you’re just a bit overwhelmed with work? PHILIPPIANS: 4-6 NIV Do not be anxious about anything, but in everything, by prayer and petition, with thanksgiving, present your requests to God.

“What you need, is a nice hot cup of coco, some encouraging words, and a hug from mommy.

Sweetie it’s okay to get upset every once in a while, that’s part of your emotional system, and it just alerts you that your system is still working properly.

“Nothing, to get you all worked up about.

What you need to do, is learn how to handle the negative situations that arise in your life.

With work, Abby’s party, the misunderstandings with John has caused pressure to arise. Sweetie you need to relax and calm you down, not to worry.

You and John will overcome the challenges, come into an understanding, and agreement, the party will be outstanding and work will fall back into place.

Honey, it’s all only for a season, things will be back to normal, in no time.

Thanks mom, “I really needed to hear that.”

Things just get overwhelming for me I just don’t know how to express my emotions to john anymore.

“Sweetie, you just need to be kind and gentle, talk to him and let him know how you feel, ( EPHESIANS 4:3 NIV ) Be kind and compassionate to one another, forgiving each other, just as Christ God forgave you.

That's all there really is to it.

Wow, mother you make it all sound so easy. “It is easy, honey if you just listen and speak to him from the heart.

I guess you’re right, mother, “I just need to learn how to express my emotions, be a little bit more gentle, and kind to John.

“After all that is said and done, “he is still your husband. “And he deserves your respect.”

Mother Thanks, I feel so much better. I appreciate your patience and I do apologize for the outburst.

“Apology accepted, sweetie.”

But I don’t think I’m the one that needs the apology?

With a deep glare into my eyes Christina smiled reached out to hug me, and said, thanks mom you’re the best!

“No Christina, God is?

“Now, what do you think about vanilla with chocolate swirls & chocolate mousse cream filling, for the cake?”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/12
You have a great idea for a story. I can definitely relate to how stressful planning a party really can be. There are so many things to do and plan for, not to mention the MC needs to do all of this while keeping up with a toddler!

However, I had a difficult time trying to figure out who was talking. Try to add some descriptions between the dialog to let the reader know who is talking. For example before the opening dialog you could add something like Christina plopped into the chair and covered her face with her hands. That would not only let the reader know that Christina is talking but it would also show the reader she is frustrated and tired.

Your message is really a nice one and one I think just about everyone needs reminding of from time to time. I liked how the mother gently calmed Christina with words from the scripture. They were a perfect fit for your story. Good job.
Sunny Loomis 11/22/12
Good story. Remember to put quotation marks around dialog, and proofread your work. Thank you.