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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Irritated (11/08/12)

TITLE: Helen's Hellish Manners
By Olawale Ogunsola


Like the Ethiopian cannot change his skin or the leopard its spots, Helen could not turn over a new leaf.

Although she loved going out with her husband, Emmy, in the same attire as two love birds, the man never agreed. This had been a bone of contention throughout their three year old marriage.

Sam, a close family friend who had settled scores of rifts between them, did not agree with Emmy's complaints.

One day, Sam came to invite the couple to his new house but the husband was on an emergency journey. Helen agreed to follow Sam but he wanted the man to arrive to be part of the visit.

Helen promised to take her husband there when he arrived.

Because his car was in the shop, Sam and Helen walked along the edge of the road.

Suddenly, Helen darted across the road and started talking with a middle-age man.

Sam saw the man open his purse to give her a few currency notes. Without saying even thank you, Helen smiled and hurried back to her family friend.

The stranger clenched his teeth and glared at Helen. He started to open his mouth but instead clamped his lips shut.

Soon after, a taxi cab parked with a driver and a passenger both in the front seat. As Sam and Helen boarded it, another young man joined them.

After an exchange of pleasantries, Helen spoke with the young man "Uncle, please give me whatever you can afford to help me, I'm visiting a friend and I don't have enough money in my pocket."

The man smiled and nodded his head while fumbling to open a Christian book. He pulled a few dollars out and handed them to her.

Disatisfied, Helen protested "So I'm not worth more than a few dollars? Does it mean if I'm your girlfriend on a visit, you wouldn't give me any more?"

The man was baffled "What do you mean? Madam, that's what I can afford at the moment. I didn't plan this at all. God bless you." The man took a deep breath and scowled, but Helen just turned away and ignored him.

As soon as they left the cab, she saw a mini market pleaded with Sam "Please buy me some nuts."

"You're free to do so." Sam leaned away and the vein in his neck pulsated.

After this, they boarded a bus that would take them to Ayepe where Sam now resides.

As Helen started eating the nuts, she started to report some of her domestic problems to Sam at top of her voice.

The man said nothing.

As she enjoyed her nuts, she used her left index finger to dislodge food from her mouth to swallow. She cleared her throat to continue eating and talking.

However, before she could start, a decent lady on the seat directly in front of her coiled herself to correct her.

The lady said "Madam, you're a disgrace to womanhood. All your manners irritated me. I think no serious minded man would want to be seen with you and your atrocious manners."

Sam grinned when the woman chastised Helen, but at the same time his face turned bright red when he realised the stranger had basically called him a fool.

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/18/12
This is a cute story. Helen's manners were definitely atrocious and I'm sure irritating as well. The ending was really funny and made me chuckle.
Meghan Andersch 11/20/12
I enjoyed your story. The style reminds me of the traditional moral fables. Your ending was very clever. :)
Darleen Coon11/22/12
Your portrayal of Helen, really made her not likeable. I was glad that at the end, someone really told her what they thought of her behavior.

Thanks for sharing!