The Official Writing Challenge
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I really enjoyed this. At first I thought you might be stretching the topic with the name (I thought at least have his nickname be Park) but you did cover the topic, not only with the name but the fact that it took place in a baseball field/park. You did an outstanding job of showing and painted some great pictures in my mind. This was a delight to read from beginning to end. I liked how you built the conflict and though the ending was predictable, I still enjoyed every word. This should do well.
11/04/12
You developed a strong character in this well written baseball story...it was really enjoyable and attention grabbing!
I enjoyed reading this and just the simple way in which you told the story. I forgot I was reading it on this board, it could very well have been part of a novel or short story. I like your writing style. Good luck. It is humbling to see that you consider yourself a beginner. Great job!
The "scent of dust in the air..." now there is a writer who can turn a phrase and one who can tell a story. Well done and congratulation on your EC. Thoroughly enjoyed the read.
11/08/12
Well, I have to admit to knowing absolutely nothing about baseball but I really did like this! An excellent story. I love the humour - particularly your last line. Congratulations on EC placing. Well deserved.
11/08/12
Oh, this was absolutely delightful! I loved the entire story and its baseball field setting, and I smiled at why your MC was called Parker--then and now! Congratulations on your well-deserved E.C.! WAY TO WRITE!! :)
11/08/12
Thanks for all the encouraging comments. You guys are the best! Or as we say in the south, Ya'll are spactacular!
11/09/12
I love this little jaunt through Parker's memory. It was nice--I also like the feeling at the end of him having a secret that he keeps to himself about himself that makes him smile. Makes me wonder about what kinds of secrets we all have--makes me realize that to really know another person you have to hear their stories. We don't take the time to do that in our world today--not much anyway. Faithwriters do. :-)
11/09/12
I'm not much of a ball fan but your story intrigued and entertained me. Good job and congratulations.
A well deserved win. Congrats!