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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Park (10/25/12)

TITLE: We Found Her There
By Deborah Sampson
10/29/12


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Slamming the door behind them, they all came into the room, the look on their faces made it clear they had no luck in finding Lucie, our ten year old daughter. She knew better than to take off on her own. Adam’s face looked tired as he reached for a freshly brewed pot of coffee.

“Did you look all over the Park too?” they just looked at me like I had to be kidding, but I wasn’t. I wanted to scream at times, being in this wheel chair limited me in doing so much; I felt like I was letting Lucie down, what could a crippled mom do in a time like this? The tears just streamed down my face, I felt lost and scared, except for Adam and Lucy, my family lived back home in Idaho. We made the move out here two years ago, and nothing went right since then.

In the beginning, life was great, that is, till the accident. I was coming home from an evening meeting at church, when my cell rang, and I reached for it, I knew better but that’s when you think, I can do this and drive, the curve came faster than I anticipated and the next thing I knew as I said hello into the phone, I crashed into the utility pole.

I did not remember anything after that, till I woke up in the hospital with Adam by my side. Pastor Jensen was in the room also.

“What happened?” I moaned as I tried to move, I was bruised, and my arms had cuts, but what was strange and frightening was that I could not feel my legs, I tried to roll to the side and nothing happened. “What’s wrong with me, Adam?”

Adam then told me that I would be paralyzed from the waist down.

“Not me, I cried, why Lord would you let this happen to me, I didn’t deserve this. Heal me Lord, I can’t be this way, if you love me heal me!”

Pastor Jensen tried to talk with me that it wasn’t the Lord’s fault, “He loves you, Adele, please remember that.”

I could see his concern, but I needed to lash out and I told him to please leave and take his God with him.

Now, a year later I hadn’t talked with him or anyone from the church. I did not even want Adam and Lucie going, but Adam wouldn’t hear of that, I could just stay home and be miserable about my life, but he wasn’t letting them suffer.

“Adam, are you sure about the Park? Lucie likes to play there and she is a very good hider, maybe you didn’t spot her? If I could just get out of this chair.”

“Come on Adele, you could go to the Park in that chair if you would just try, I’d help you.”

I looked at him, why he thought I should be searching to; didn’t he understand how hard it was to maneuver around even in the house? Just to cook, make coffee was a chore. This was Lucie, she had to try, “Adam get me to the Park, I need to look for myself, Please!”

Thirty minutes later we were in the Park, it felt good, Lucie and I spent a lot of time here, laughing, playing, that was before. The wheelchair moved easily on the path, I rolled the chair up and down as I called out to Lucie, but no answer came.

I became uneasy, something kept nagging me to call on the Lord for help, I felt so lost on where to begin, but the Holy Spirit made it easy, as I poured out my hurts, my mistakes, my fears about Lucie, He immediately gave me the peace that surpasses understanding in times like these, I again started calling out for Lucie, and minutes later we all heard a muffled cry by the old elm tree, around behind the tree laid Lucie.

The medic that was with the group knelt and checked her out. She was knocked unconscious, but no broken bones. She had been trying to climb the tree.

I thanked all the church people who helped. I apologized to Pastor Jensen. A trip to the hospital proved Lucie would be fine with rest.

It’s funny, I hadn’t thought about me since I got to the Park. I knew then that I wanted to start living again, but only with the Lord in our lives forever.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/03/12
This is a great story. You had a real attention grabber right from the beginning and I was eager to read on.

You had some tiny errors like to instead of too and some missing capital letters or misplaced quotation marks. Having a challenge buddy might help you catch that. If you need help finding one feel free to PM me.

I could so relate to this MC as I suffer a chronic illness and two of the three kids know nothing but Mom being sick. I often worried I wasn't enough but then is anyone enough without God? You did a great job on this one.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 11/03/12
The other thing I wanted to mention is be careful that your title doesn't give away the ending. I'm terrible at reading titles but had I seen this before the ending would be clear. Maybe something like Missing would be a good grabber for those who do read titles. Again I did like the story a lot.
Frankie Kemp 11/04/12
I agree that this is a powerful story--you tell a lot for having a limited number of words to use.

I like the title. I think it has double meaning. It wasn't just Lucie that was found at the park. I don't know if you meant it to be that way, but I see that . . .
Phyllis Inniss 11/05/12
Quite a good story. So many feel God has let them down and no longer want to hear His name. You did a good job in showing how important it is to trust Him because He is there for us at all times. You found both Lucie and yourself again.