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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Cup - 10-25-12 Deadline (10/18/12)

TITLE: The Replacement 10-19-12
By Sharon Cooper
10/19/12


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The Replacement

They had just finished remodeling the living room couple months ago. The living room is decorated and furnished except for one item: a sofa.

On the way to the estate auction, Mallory thought about the sofa. It needed to be just the right color, style, and size. Thus far, any attempts to locate the sofa had been futile. Hopefully, this sofa will be the one for which they were looking.

Arriving at the house being sold, she and her husband Matt went inside and began looking around. Suddenly, Mallory saw the sofa.

“Look Matt,” she exclaimed.

“There’s the sofa.”

The both stood and looked at it for awhile.

“You look around while I check on the details for the auction.”

Matt walked away and Mallory began looking around. As she went into the formal dining room, something caught her eye.

“It can’t be!” she thought to herself.

“That is the same cup that matches my dishes.”

She remembered how the cup had been broken a number of years ago when they first moved into their current home. The set of dishes had been handed down for several generations, originally belonging to her great-grandmother. Then her mother gave her the dishes when she and Matt first married.

The china had survived the move except for the one cup. Mallory was heartbroken when she discovered the broken cup in the box. She had looked in antique shops for a replacement, but was knever able to locate the cup. So she gave up hope of ever finding one.

Now, she is looking at the exact same cup. The information stated the cup was the last remaining piece of a set of dishes. Mallory wanted that cup so much. But she knew they couldn’t buy both the cup and sofa.

She couldn’t help but think about the cup during the auction. She suddenly realized the sofa was up next. As the bidding began, she watched Matt.

“What’s wrong with him? Why isn’t he bidding on the sofa? He knows we need it for the house.”

There it was. Someone made the last bid. The sofa was gone and Matt didn’t even make a bid. She was so furious, she got up and went to the car.

As she sat watching tv in the den, Mallory couldn’t help but wonder why Matt didn’t bid on the sofa. Tomorrow’s their wedding anniversary, but right now she was in no mood to celebrate. Just then, Matt came into the den and sat down beside her. He had a strange look on his face; and a package in his hand.

“Honey,” he said.

“I didn’t want to wait until tomorrow to give this to you. Happy anniversary.”

She took the package and opened it. To her surprise, it was the cup. She couldn’t believe it. He had seen the cup, and made a bid on the cup instead of the sofa.

“Oh well,” she thought.

“Back to looking for a sofa. But now, I have my cup back.”


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Marie Hearty 10/25/12
Crazy how she found that cup many years later. I liked how her husband knew her so well that he knew that she wanted the cup and bought it for her, sacrificing the sofa. A good message here.

God Bless!
Camille (C D) Swanson 10/25/12
A lovely story with layers of meaning. Great job.
God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/31/12
This is a sweet story. I enjoyed the characters. Going to the auction brought back many childhood memories for me.

Try not to repeat the same words too close together. I think if you go back and count the number of times you used the word sofa and cup, you'll be surprised. One solution is a good thesaurus and another is restructuring the sentences. For example in your second paragraph, you can switch the sentences around a bit to avoid repeating the word with something like this: On the way to the estate auction, Mallory thought about what she wanted; of course it needed to be the right color, style, and size. Thus far, any attempts to locate her dream piece had been futile, but hopefully this auction would have the ideal centerpiece for their home.

I think you did a delightful job of writing on topic. My parents were antique collectors so I really understand how devastating it can be to have a set with a missing piece. It's also not easy to find a replacement either. You did a nice job of developing a few conflicts within the story to keep the reader interested. I think the husband was a sweetheart and chuckled about the wife's mini-temper tantrum. We women have been known to go sulk in the car. This was a delightful story. Nice job.
Myrna Noyes10/31/12
This was an interesting story with a sweet ending! Personally, I would have gone for the special cup instead of the sofa, too! :)