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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Blessed (10/11/12)

TITLE: A Moment
By Jenna Fowls
10/18/12


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I had been living on and off the streets my whole life.
My mom was sick; my dad was gone.
The world was my enemy: cruel
I had no problem taking what it wouldnít give me.
I didnít care about hurting people who hurt me.
Why show mercy to the merciless: guilt-less
I could go where I wanted and do what I pleased,
No man controlled my destiny,
No destiny controlled me: freedom?
They looked at me to loathe.
They ran past me to fear.
My life was an excuse for their scorn: ignorant
The past was swallowed by a shameless abyss.
The present-a constant tide.
No future could penetrate my hopeless eyes: haunting
I donít know where she came from,
I donít know who she was.
In my darkest hour when emptiness was consuming,
She stopped to sit beside me.
Her smile soothed the torment,
Her glow pushed back the black.
A moment of peace: Blessed.


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Charla Diehl 10/18/12
This piece was filled with gripping emotion and spiritual insight. It ended profoundly and fit the topic beautifully.
The only advice I might offer is to put a space between each thought-filled verse--this gives the reader time to ponder those specific words.
Great piece of work. Look forward to reading more of your entries.
lynn gipson 10/19/12
WoW...this touched me on so many levels, your deep soul comes through with clarity...I loved this.

God Bless
lynn gipson 10/19/12
WoW...this touched me on so many levels, your deep soul comes through with clarity...I loved this.

God Bless
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/19/12
Wow! You say so much in so few words. This piece really gripped my heart. I could relate in some ways as I have been tormented by illness. Also I'm reminded of how blessed I am by my kids. When I read the line mom was sick I thought about how I worried that my illness would negatively affect my kids but they are three of the most wonderful creatures on this planet. I am blessed and your poem touched me.
CD Swanson 10/24/12
Powerful! Touching, and it gripped my heart.

God bless~