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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Blessed (10/11/12)

TITLE: Donovan's Blessings
By Sharon Cooper
10/17/12


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As Donovan finished supper, he looked toward the window and noticed it was getting dark. It was time to light the kerosene lamp.

ďMy how the day passes so quick,Ē he thought to himself.

ďThe days are getting shorter. Itíll soon be winter. Seems like only yesterday Maddie and I had just gotten married and moved into this one room cabin. And now our children have families of their own. My sweet Maddie is with the Lord now. It wonít be long before Iíll go home to be with my Lord. My, how he has blessed me through the years. Though this cabin is still small, it does have 2 bedrooms and a kitchen now. I built the kitchen for Maddie. She said she wanted a separate room where she could cook. Never could deny Maddie. Whatever she wanted, I tried to get for her. There were times though when there just wasnít enough money to spoil her the way I wanted.

We always had food to eat, though there wasnít always a lot left over. I was able to grow some vegetables. I still plant a little garden, but it get harder each year with my advancing age and failing health. We didnít have the best clothes, but Maddie and the children never complained. The children went to school and made fine adults. I sure am proud of them.

The boy Buster is the sheriff in town. He and his wife Molly donít live very far away. My daughter Mary and her husband Dalton donít live very far either. Mary and Molly comes to see me. They make sure Iím well and take medicine. Never have liked to take medicine, but the Doctor says I need some for my heart. I know Molly and Mary mean well, so I just let them have their say. Dalton and Buster have come over to make some repairs to the house. Used to I could do all those repairs, but it seems with my heart and all, Iím just not able to do the repairs for myself.

It is such a joy to see the grandkids. Mary and Dalton wants me to live with them. I donít think Iíll do that. Theyíre busy raising their own family. Buster and Molly says that I need someone to look after me. Theyíve been after me to move in with them too. But like I said before, they also have a family to raise. The kids donít need an old man under foot all the time too. Maddie was here when she died, and Iíll be here when I go to be with the Lord.

Well, Iíd better go to bed. Donít want to waste the kerosene. Have a lot to do tomorrow. Need to go to town and pick up a few things. Maybe Iíll stop by and see the grandkids. Should make it home by dark. Good night, sweet Maddie."


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Colin Swann10/19/12
I liked and enjoyed your story. It is a gift to grow old gracefully and you showed that well in your well written muse. thanks!

Colin (Gold Member)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/19/12
This is a beautiful monologue. It shows that it is important to count our blessings every day, even on the bad days. Actually especially on the bad days it's important to be reminded of how truly we are blessed by material things but more so by Jesus' love.

I noted some tiny red ink. In this: Mary and Molly comes
It should be come. I also noticed you capitalized the Doctor. If you put a qualifier in front like the or my then it's lowercase but if you use it as a name--Good morning Doctor--then you capitalize it.

You did a wonderful job of writing on topic. I also thought your message is one everyone needs to hear from time to time. I enjoyed the ending. I think it could be read a couple of ways. One that he was just getting in the car and going home or 2. perhaps he sensed something and knew he would be seeing Maddie quite soon in Heaven. Personally I like that it is open-ended like that because each reader depending on her needs at the exact moment she reads it will choose the ending that she needs. God will make sure of that. This was a wonderful read.
Phee Paradise 10/22/12
A blessed life, indeed. You summarized the important things in a lifetime with some good details. I liked Maddie because the MC loved her.
CD Swanson 10/24/12
Sweet, moving and very well written. Thank you.

God Bless~