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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Funny (10/04/12)

TITLE: GOD'S CHOICE
By Rose king
10/11/12


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GOD'S CHOICE

Walking down the street,with an anointing oil in his horn to Jesse’s house, planning to anoint the next king of Israel, the one to take charge of Israel’s affairs, prophet Samuel anticipated the task before him, wondering on whom the kingship would fall on among Jesse’s children.
Then, Jesse presenting his sons before the man of God and lo beholding Eliab the first son, he said; ‘surely the Lord’s anointed is before him’ but God said to him hold your peace, do not look at the appearance or stature for I the Lord do not consider this. And Jesse presented seven of his sons before the prophet but none did God choose from them and Samuel asked; Are these all children? And Jesse said: there remains one, the youngest, a shepherd, tending to my flocks and Samuel said: fetch him. As David approaches, looking rough and without a beautiful countenance to look on, the Lord said to Samuel; Arise, anoint him: for he is the one. What a choice!
Samuel had intended to anoint Eliab who was good in appearance and well qualified for that position but God said: “No, I look at the heart and not the physical appearance”. Here is my choice; the youngest, one looked down on, left to tend the sheep all alone in the field, considered to be immature and inexperienced. So funny, God chooses the foolish things of this world to confound the wise and the weak things to confound the things that are mighty.1st Corinthians 1:27(NKJV)


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Camille (C D) Swanson 10/11/12
Loved this! Wonderful job with so few words. Powerful, and good message.
Thanks. God Bless~
lynn gipson 10/12/12
Good article, great message. One thing I have learned in these several months I have been with Faithwriters is to use my spell check...it finds all kinds of things....I enjoyed this...keep writing!
Marie Hearty 10/12/12
Excellent message. Thanks for writing this.

God Bless!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/13/12
I like the scripture you chose for this topic. As humans we try to think like God and are often left a tad befuddled. You really demonstrate that in this short but potent piece.

The one thing I'd encourage you to do is to highlight the retelling of the story with more of your own words. Paint the reader a picture. Also the first sentence is quite long esp for a story under 750 words. By breaking it down with some showing, you'll be more likely to grab the reader's attention immediately. For example something like this: "Who would it be?" A chill ran down Samuel's back as he speculated which one of Jesse's son would become the anointed one.
That is just a quick example to show you what I mean.

I also liked how you wrapped up the ending from a quote from the New Testament. It's always exciting to see one part of the Bible hold up an entirely different section. You managed to hit on the topic funny--not in the funny ha, ha (though I'm sure some of David's brothers snickered when David was brought in) but also in the funny strange way. I do wish you had gone into more detail and sprinkle the story with some more of your words because I found this quite intriguing and wanted to read on. Nice job.


Judy Sauer 10/17/12
Interesting story.

You have long, run on, sentences. This makes reading a story hard on the eyes and to comprehend. A suggestion I offer is to cut your lengthy wording into smaller chunks. It offers more opportunities, not just for comprehension or readability, but also for more creative wording.

Keep writing.