The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this little exchange between the two. You did a nice job of covering the topic.I also liked the name of the program and your story. :)

Instead of using taglines like he said or she replied. Use this spot to show the character's emotions. Try instead something like--"Yes." Mary gritted her teeth as she felt the blood rush to her face. This shows that she is a bit frustrated or embarrassed. Also be careful about switching from first person (I) to third person (Mary).

Overall you did a nice job of developing the conflict and then having the two work together for a resolution. You have some great ideas. Keep writing, I'm excited to read more of your work.
The title here is good, the dialogue is good, and it's a good take on the topic. It just needs a little proofreading in the area of spelling and grammar. (e.g. "I'm happy about the example my parents sat (set) for me.").

Overall I liked this and look forward to reading more from you.
Congratulations on a good piece. You have talent and it shows. Keep writing! With time and experience you will grow.
I enjoyed this entry very much; however, I felt it ended abruptly. I don't know if that is because of the word limit, but I felt like I'd been stood up. All in all, however, I enjoyed the message you had in it. Good writing.