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This is a good story. You do a nice job of developing the topic and working through it.
The only thing I was a tad confused about was the setting. I thought it was in a church fellowship hall until the doorbell rang, then I thought it was in his house. Fifty kids is a lot to manage with just one adult. It really shows how God was at work here. You did a nice job of writing on topic and delivering a nice message.
I love that whole idea of the apples. How easy to eat junk food when it's widely available, spiritual junk food especially. Nice way to present a Biblical message.
What a wonderful message you have in this powerful entry. I thoroughly agree with you that there is so much junk when it comes to the world. You did an excellent job in relaying your message. Nicely done.
Love the way you turned an awkward and potentially dangerous situation(kids with no junk food! LOL) into a wonderful biblical message!

Great job and God bless!