The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a good story. You do a nice job of developing the topic and working through it.
The only thing I was a tad confused about was the setting. I thought it was in a church fellowship hall until the doorbell rang, then I thought it was in his house. Fifty kids is a lot to manage with just one adult. It really shows how God was at work here. You did a nice job of writing on topic and delivering a nice message.
09/07/12
I love that whole idea of the apples. How easy to eat junk food when it's widely available, spiritual junk food especially. Nice way to present a Biblical message.
09/11/12
What a wonderful message you have in this powerful entry. I thoroughly agree with you that there is so much junk when it comes to the world. You did an excellent job in relaying your message. Nicely done.
09/12/12
Love the way you turned an awkward and potentially dangerous situation(kids with no junk food! LOL) into a wonderful biblical message!

Great job and God bless!