The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/12
Thank you for sharing this heart warming story. I enjoyed it. You took me right into the story as if I were there with you.

Nicely done. God Bless~
This is a lovely testimonial. I've never tasted the nectar, straight from the flower, but I could picture it with your words. You did a grand job of stretching it out so that I could picture every detail of the sister "milking" the flower.

You may want to break the first paragraph into 2 or 3 shorter ones, especially with a story this short. I would have loved to see more of these two darling characters. Was the little sister perhaps a bit nervous that big sister was paying a trick on her? Or did she totally trust her sister, much like the little children of whom Jesus speaks?

You took such a fresh approach on the topic and it is so appreciated. I really liked the message you demonstrated and it speaks volumes. I love the idea that you can close your eyes and still taste that nectar and imagine it when you hear the words of God. So sweet!
09/09/12
Congrats. God bless~