The Official Writing Challenge
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The abcb rhyme scheme works, but the beat of each stanza is difficult. I like the story in the poem, work on the prosody and you have a great offering.
I agree with Dub--work on the rhythm. It's a charming poem about a sweet, sweet subject.
I liked this sweet comparison. There was a few spots that missed a beat, but nothing that can't be remedied easily. Nice work! God bless ya, littlelight
I love this poem. The sweetness of the newborn is well portrayed and the comparison before we become newborns in Christ is effective.
Very very nice! watching my two little ones while I'm reading this makes it even nicer :)