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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fragrance (10/24/05)

TITLE: Like A Child
By Kell-Ann Hoyte
10/31/05


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I love tiny legs and fingers
The downy softness of their hair
Angelic smiles to melt hard hearts
And snuggling close with care

I love the gurgle of happy laughter
So spontaneous and free
Every action true and honest
As it should always be

But the thing I love the most
Of these Godís tiny ones
Is the scent of innocence and purity
Thatís strongest in newborns

Talcum powder, baby wipes
Lotion and shampoo
These cannot compare, O little ones
To the very essence of you

We have that sweet pure baby smell
When we are born anew
As earnest praise and honest hearts
We lift up unto You

But time goes by and people change
As we begin to grow
Soon murmured prayers and grateful thanks
Are done all just for show

A sweat-stained brow and callused palms
We offer to our King
Without the fragrance of our first love
Itís not pleasing unto Him

Consider, brethren from whence we came
Persecuted and alone
Rejected and ashamed
Until our sins were atoned

Forgiven, accepted, loved, reborn
Lord, if we remember these
Then our praise would always be
A savor unto Thee


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dub W11/01/05
The abcb rhyme scheme works, but the beat of each stanza is difficult. I like the story in the poem, work on the prosody and you have a great offering.
Jan Ackerson 11/02/05
I agree with Dub--work on the rhythm. It's a charming poem about a sweet, sweet subject.
Nina Phillips11/03/05
I liked this sweet comparison. There was a few spots that missed a beat, but nothing that can't be remedied easily. Nice work! God bless ya, littlelight
Phyllis Inniss 11/04/05
I love this poem. The sweetness of the newborn is well portrayed and the comparison before we become newborns in Christ is effective.
Shari Armstrong 11/05/05
Very very nice! watching my two little ones while I'm reading this makes it even nicer :)