The Official Writing Challenge
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08/09/12
Nicely written with a little different approach. You covered not only the topic for the week, but also approached the issue of when we should reserve our opinions. One of my favorite verses in the Bible is "Be still and now that I am God." You covered both areas of this story quite nicely.
08/10/12
Great job with this entry. It has a significan meaning on many different levels.

I loved the scriptures you chose, some of my all time favorites.

Thanks. God Bless~
This entry was definitely on topic and helped me to remember not to nag, but to pray instead.

I had trouble following the conversation at the top of the entry. When I read it for a second time, I understood who was speaking, but I think it was missing some information.

I liked the Bible verses very much.
08/13/12
Very Good! You took the right approach...when someone pesters me about something it just makes it that much more difficult.....well written and true to life!
08/13/12
Very Good! You took the right approach...when someone pesters me about something it just makes it that much more difficult.....well written and true to life!
08/13/12
Very Good! You took the right approach...when someone pesters me about something it just makes it that much more difficult.....well written and true to life!
08/13/12
Your MC is a smart woman to trust in the Lord rather than nagging the husband. How true: so many food excesses are due to stress.
I think this is a great devotional. You set it up beautifully with a real life issue that many of us can relate to. It grabbed my attention and I was eager to see where you were going.

I did notice you had a few incomplete sentences, especially after a quote. The days of he said and she said have merged into encouraging writers to do showing instead of taglines. When you have something like "I'm okay," he said. Then the quote and tagline all have to be there. But when you start to show like "I'm okay." He reached out and rubbed my shoulders. Then you need complete sentences. One example would be this -- in a resigned tone, as I've heard this all before. That's an incomplete sentence. You can fix it by doing something like this after the quote-- I lowered my voice and rolled my eyes. I had heard this all before. That shows the reader a picture of the MC and her emotions.

With that little thing aside, you did a great job with this. It is common that we often want to fix others but the truth is we can only change ourselves and pray that the change and God will help the other person fix what they are responsible for. The scriptures you chose were a perfect fit. You tackled the topic and delivered an urgent and important message without coming off as preachy or sanctimonious. Instead you shared your story and what God taught you from that lesson. I'm far more likely to learn this way than I am if someone says you should do this or that. I really enjoyed this piece and have learned from it. Thanks for sharing such a personal story.
08/16/12
Congratulations! God Bless~
08/16/12
Hey, congratulations, I knew this one would be a winner! REally good writing!
God Bless. Lynn