The Official Writing Challenge
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08/04/12
Nicely done! I loved your free verse poem which said a lot about the topic and made it obvious of how much you love the Lord. Good writing!
08/05/12
Powerful, prolific and totally engaging in so many ways. I loved this wonderful and thought provoking entry.

Thank you. God Bless~
This is a powerful poem. it starts out a tad dark which I can totally relate to. Immediately I felt an instant connection with the MC.

The only thing I might suggest would be not to use too many exclamation points. You do a wonderful job of picking just the right words. They do the exclaiming for you.

You handled the topic nicely and though the beginning may have felt a tad bit of despair, you brought forth the light and left the reader with a delightful sense of hope.
Congratulations for ranking 7th in your level!