The Official Writing Challenge
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07/26/12
Ah, yes, you had both women pegged correctly; in particular, Martha who was always busy "doing." I found your story showed the difference between Mary and Martha, while it still was on topic at hand. There were a couple sentences that seemed awkward to me... they seemed incomplete; however, this was a different, but nice take on the subject. Nicely written.
07/27/12
Nice job with the retelling of the familiar Bible story. I enjoyed it. Thanks. God Bless~
I'll admit when I first started reading I thought --another Martha and Mary story. It seems there have been so many this quarter. Then about a third of the way in, you took a nice turn and I found myself smiling and leaning closer to the screen. I liked the neighbors coming by. It showed how one-sided poor Martha was because she didn't even invite her neighbors in to meet Jesus. She was too busy fussing to realize her helpers would have loved to seen Jesus up close and personal. It's a brilliant allegory of how often we get busy in our lives and forget to invite our friends in to meet Jesus.