The Official Writing Challenge
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I like your poem/story. I like the way you characterized the items in the kitchen. This certainly is a new take on being in the kitchen. Thanks for that! I struggle with poems, but glad you have them down.
07/20/12
This is GOOD! and I wish the mc good luck as well...I need to eat healthier also, and this means a lot to me. Thank you,,,,
07/20/12
This is GOOD! and I wish the mc good luck as well...I need to eat healthier also, and this means a lot to me. Thank you,,,,
07/20/12
Great message and great poem! I liked the mixture of truths and struggles and then calling on the Lord to solve it all. Nicely done.

God bless~
07/20/12
Excellent message here. I like what you've done with the poem incorporating the theme quite well. Good job!
07/20/12
Thank you all for your encouraging comments!
This is a lovely poem that will touch many people. I had been super skinny my whole life. Even with all three, full-term pregnancies the most I weighed was 135 or so. Everyone told me I'd never have to worry about losing weight but they were wrong. Your story took me to simpler days while giving me a vision of the future if I can't find a way to redeem myself. I think the best part for me was no matter what her weight was the MC was happiest in the kitchen and used thst guide to help better herself. Good job.
07/22/12
It's refreshing to read an entry with a different perspective on the kitchen--how we have to be careful to keep our often-favorite place our friend and not our enemy. Thanks for sharing what you felt about being "in the kitchen." You did a good job of keeping the tone of your poem light and hopeful. In spite of the fact that your "shiny granite counters" and "cherry wood cabinets" have played a part in sabotaging your health, your choice of words shows that you still see your kitchen as a place that can be changed because your narrator has declared victory.
07/23/12
I love this poem. Just what I needed today. Thank you.
A good poem and easily understood. More interest given to dieting than the kitchen, but that's okay since that is where we find our food - some we should leave apart. Good job,

Janice85
07/26/12
Congrats! God Bless~