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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fragrance (10/24/05)

TITLE: Dinner for Two
By Brandi Roberts
10/30/05


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Perfume? Christina's finger traced the edge of the bottle. She hoped it wasn't an expensive brand. Already Daniel had sent her dozens of flowers, each one with a separate note quoting some lover's limerick, and never mimicking the same bouquet as the last. This gift was accompanied by a request: dinner for two at an extravagant restaurant.

She wanted desperately to go, to be swept off her feet in romance, but quickly reminded herself why she couldn't. If she were to accept his invitation, it would only mean that she would have to admit she was disabled, something she didn't offer freely.

As a young girl, Christina had often pretended she was normal like the rest of the kids in her class. Her parents told her that she was special, but all that meant to her was that she was different. Now, as a grown woman, she found herself still wanting to pretend, although, now she couldn't understand why. She lived an above average life, had a wonderful job with great pay, her own apartment, and the romantic interests of a wonderful, Christian man. What more could she ask for? Still, it was not enough to fill the hole that told her she wasn't complete, wasn't good enough.

Her fingers trembled as she reached for the telephone. What ever was she going to say? Dialing his number, Christina tried to swallow the lump of anxiety that crept into her throat.

"Alexander's residence." That voice sent goosebumps scattering across her arms.

"D-daniel? Hi, this is Christina." The lump grew larger.

"Christina! Hi, uh, did you get the gift?" His voice was soft and easy to her ears.

"Yes, I did, thank you."

"So?" Was that a whisper of doubt?

"Of course I'd like to go to dinner with you." She could feel her face burning.

"Good! Tomorrow at six. How does that sound?"

"Great!"

The tremble in her fingers had made its way into her stomach. What would she wear?

Christina stood at the entrance of the restaurant, her stomach trembled. The simple black halter dress was the perfect choice for tonight, the fall had been very favorable this year, and she made sure to wear the perfume he had bought for her. She did a quick check of her hair in the window's reflection, and proceeded through the doors.

"Ma'am." The host nodded in acknowledgment as he reached for her coat. "Reservations?"

"I believe my date has already arrived, a Mr. Daniel Alexander." She spotted him sitting in a corner examining a single, white rose.

"Ah, yes, Mr. Alexander. Please, follow me." Christina followed the man to the table where her date was waiting.

Daniel flashed a jubilant smile as he rose from his seat. As Christina returned his smile, the host fumbled to pull her chair out for her. When the two of them were finally seated, the host turned to Daniel.

"Your waiter will be with you shortly." And he whisked away, back to his post.

"I'm so glad you could come." As he handed the rose over to her, his cheeks flushed. "I see, er, smell that you're wearing your perfume. I love that fragrance, don't you?"

"Well, to be honest, I don't know. I can't smell." Relief mixed with anxiety brought tears to the corner of her eyes.

"You can't smell? Have a cold, or...?" He seemed confused.

"No, not a cold. I was born without my sense of smell." She fidgeted with her rose, avoiding his eyes.

"So, all the flowers and the perfume I sent you, you couldn't smell them?" His question revealed disappointment.

"Not at all, but I enjoyed them!" She tried to humor him.

"Well, just so you know, none of the flowers I sent you can compare to the way you smell, and look, right now." His hand reached out and squeezed hers. "Can I ask you something?"

"Sure." She liked the way his hand felt on hers.

"Would you mind, if I, uh, courted you?" He pulled his hand away, and began rearranging the silverware beside his plate. "I mean, dating is fine for someone else, but a true lady deserves to be courted. We could..."

She interrupted him. "Yes, I mean, no. I mean, I would love it if you would court me."

Again Christina felt her cheeks burning. The hole began to shrink.


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Amy Michelle Wiley 11/01/05
I liked it! Great job.
terri tiffany11/01/05
Wonderful! Loved your descriptions. This is VERY good!!
dub W11/01/05
What a nice essay. I really enjoyed this, all of the elements are there. Good job.
blessings - dub
D. Phenes11/01/05
kept me wondering what was christina's disability.. on my toes till the end. just wanted to know how they met.. thanks for sharing..djdeb
Laurie Glass11/01/05
I, too, kept wondering what her disability was. You held my attention throughout. Nicely done.
Jan Ackerson 11/02/05
For some very personal reasons, this story touched my spirit. Thank you so much for writing it.
Linda Watson Owen11/03/05
Oh, what a wonderful telling of a universal life experience (most of us can relate to being handicapped in one way or another), but with a unique and intriguing twist! Great story!
Lauren Bombardier11/03/05
What a great way to write this! Hehe...I see you used a certain inspiration.
Nina Phillips11/03/05
This was so interesting and caused me to stay with it to the end, wondering and I wasn't disappointed at all. It worked in so well with the topic, surprising me at the end. God bless ya, littlelight
Shari Armstrong 11/03/05
I would have known this author if I'd read it before hinting :) good job!
Cassie Memmer11/03/05
Good story and well done! I enjoyed it. Never thought about this before, Or it making someone feel they weree handicapped. Thanks for stretching me. Good job!
B Brenton11/04/05
This was very, very cute B. But left so many unanswered questions.
Like: how was she born without a sense of smell? It's so quirky.
Maybe if you had more space, you could add a one line explaination in there... or just something, uh... more.
Otherwise good.
You know it! :D
Jeffrey Snell11/04/05
A very romantic tale. Her disability threw me for a second, but then I thought, why not? Loss of sight or hearing might be more common, but that's what makes the story stand out. Thanks for writing it and sharing the picture in your heart!
Val Clark11/06/05
Delightful story. Well told. Great idea fitting a disability to the theme.
Debbie Sickler11/06/05
Great job Brandi! I read your hint first, so I knew this one was yours AND I know you don't have a sense of smell, but I still was trying to figure out what her disability was going to be. I thought maybe they met over the internet or something and now he'd see she was in a wheel chair or something. :)You timed it well, it's good to keep us guessing. Good details too!
Rachel Burkum11/07/05
Aww! What a sweet story. Well written, and kept my interest until the end.
Congrats for your placement as well. :)
Tammy Johnson11/07/05
Delightful! Absolutely delightful! I really enjoyed it and had no problem reading every word all the way to the end. Congrats, again! I am tickled pink! No, really, you should see me - :)
Deborah Porter 11/07/05
Hey Brandi - are you on a roll or what? Congratulations on this great 2nd place win in the Level 1 awards. I know you've already moved up to Level 2, so I don't have to tell you to go. ;-)

You also ranked 15th overall (out of 145 entries), so give yourself another pat on the back. You are doing very, very well.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)
Ann Grover11/07/05
Good for you, Brandi. Well done! I remember you fretted about 'fragrance' when the topic was posted... but you did it!
Crista Darr11/07/05
Woo hoo! This is a precious, well written story. Congratulations.


   
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