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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: PICNIC - deadline 7-12-12 @ 9:59 AM NY Time (07/05/12)

TITLE: A weapon with a packed lunch
By Garry Stopa
07/11/12


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You may be familiar with an old tale. It is about a prison escape involving an inmate who received a cake with a file in it. It makes me think of a story in the Bible. A true story, not a tale---God delivers a weapon with a packed lunch.

You can find the story in 1 Samuel 17. The story is about David who later became King of Israel. At the time of this story, David was just a young man. Israel was in battle against the Philistines. A very large man---about nine feet tall---challenged Israel to send a man out to battle him one-on-one. This manís name was Goliath. Israel was dismayed and greatly afraid. Jesse, Davidís father, sent David with a packed lunch and some snacks for his older brothers who had gone to battle.

For forty days, Goliath challenged Israel to battle. David arrived on the scene to hear him. When David heard the man, he said, ďwho is this uncircumcised Philistine, that he should defy the armies of the living God?" (1 Samuel 17:26, NKJV) David knew God would give them the victory.

David was Godís secret weapon. He went on to kill the man and give Israel victory in this battle. The Bible says, ďThe race is not to the swift, Nor the battle to the strong, Nor bread to the wise, Nor riches to men of understanding, Nor favor to men of skill; But time and chance happen to them allĒ (Ecclesiastes 9:11). I have to keep reminding myself, I do not need to be bigger or more powerful, I do not have to be wiser or better educated, I do not even have to be wealthy. This is because God only needs a willing person to work through.

If you have called on Jesus to be your Lord, He can work through you too. God wants us to win our battles (see 1 Corinthians 15:57,58). We need to put our trust in Him instead of trusting ourselves. If you are like me, you sometimes feel a little under-qualified. When I begin to feel this way, I just remind myself, I am Godís secret weapon.


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lynn gipson 07/12/12
i am living proof of what can be done if you call on Jesus and put yourself in His hands. This was great! well written and so true! God Bless You! Lynn
Jody Day 07/12/12
Nicely done devotional. Thank you!
Camille (C D) Swanson 07/13/12
Beautiful and moving. This was filled with truths that resonated throughout the entire entry. Good job.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/13/12
This is a great devotion. You picked a perfect scripture to go with your message. I think you nailed the topic in a fresh and innovative way. You also delivered the message without coming off as preachy. This is a great piece of work.
Jennifer Dawn Dexter07/15/12
This is a sweet story. You drew me into the touching little world of a child with cancer and the mother's experience in dealing with it.

I noticed first off that your first two sentences begin with an -ing word. Make sure you mix up sentence openers. You can begin a sentence so many ways and the more varied your opening words choices are throughout a piece, the more interesting it is.

Other than the very large paragraph that should be broken up, as others suggested, there were a few other formatting errors and/or typos. Be careful to proofread before hitting the submit button. The judges take these things into account.

I also agree that middle section had a lot of telling. I had a similar section in my very first challenge entry. I didn't get it at first when someone pointed it out, but have learned, over time, how to mix up the telling with more showing. And it does improve the story.

This is a wonderful story, with a nice ending. Keep writing!
Geoffrey johnstone07/19/12
You have some ability and it shows. My first impression was that you have something worth saying. With time the grammatical issues with sort themselves out.

Don't be afraid to ask for honest feedback. Practice makes perfect.