The Official Writing Challenge
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07/12/12
I was right there with you! glorious descriptions and wonderfully written. I loved this one! God Bless , LYnn
07/12/12
Very nice. Felt like I was there with you.
07/12/12
This is a lovely story. The peace you described was palpable. I think we all need Sunday picnics in the park.
07/12/12
Nicely done. Easy to read.
07/13/12
May I join you next Sunday? I was pulled in and felt the entire scene unfolding in my heart and mind's eye. Thanks.

God bless~
07/16/12
You painted a lovely picture of a picnic anyone would want to be at.

While you covered the topic well, I don't think I could say you took a "fresh take on the topic". Try thinking outside the box. See what the advanced and masters writers wrote about for ideas to get your creative juices flowing for the next one.

Just one bit of critique on the actual writing. If you combined your first two sentences, it would flow better. Example: Imagine with me a warm sunny Sunday afternoon in DeLapre Park, a small English town in the Midlands.

You are a wonderful writer. Keep it up!
07/16/12
Very interesting and left me with a good feeling inside. Good writing.