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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: PICNIC - deadline 7-12-12 @ 9:59 AM NY Time (07/05/12)

TITLE: Ocean Feast
By lynn gipson


Ocean Feast

Blankets spread on soft rippled sand,
Castles eroding away where they stand,
Baskets of goodies, coolers for thirst,
Waves lapping ashore in timely bursts!

Glorious sunlight---lazy skies of blue,
A child’s delight plays melodious tunes.
Dogs scurry in haste to catch a thrown Frisbee,
Brave sailors on surf boards head out to sea.

Mysterious Ocean for miles and miles,
Rhythmic motion calming and mild,
Being at one with God’s creation,
Brings a soul to quiet elation!

God lends this paradise for all to take part,
Stunning our minds and easing our hearts,
We wonder in awe at His vast sea of hues,
A blending of magnificent greens and blues.

As we say grace, deep thoughts fill our minds,
Grateful for wondrous times of this kind,
At one with our maker as the tide rolls in,
We know at once we are blessed twice again!

Hot dogs, cold drinks, popcorn and candy,
Devoured by all, even while a tad sandy,
Time to relax beneath a blue striped shade,
One more swim now, the sky’s getting late.

Finally we pack up and say goodbye,
To creation around us, “oh my” what a sight!
God built this scene for reflection and peace,
Thank you Dear Lord, for this Ocean feast!

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Rachael Severa 07/12/12
I like this. Nice choice of words and description. Great poem.
Laury Hubrich 07/12/12
Oh! It makes me miss my Florida vacation! Very nicely written poem.
Jody Day 07/12/12
Beautifully written. The first line "Blankets spread on soft rippled sand," is especially lovely.
Lillian Rhoades 07/13/12
Excellent! I loved the dual meaning of picnicking and feasting on the ocean. Your choice of words, rhyming and rhythm were dead on! Lovely!
CD Swanson 07/13/12
Beautiful and filled with symbolic meaning. Loved the entire clever piece.
Great job.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/13/12
This is a beautiful description of a beach picnic. I'm not a big lover of the beach but having read this I feel this desire to have such a feast both with my eyes and my stomach.
Yvonne Blake 07/15/12
It's hard to capture the ocean in words, but you did a good job of it. It certainly humbles a man before the Creator, doesn't it?
Helen Curtis07/15/12
This is such a fun and inspiring poem. I especially liked the reference to the food being somewhat sandy, but still enjoyable! Living close to the beach I, too, can appreciate this and echo your praise of God's awesome creation. Well done.
Genia Gilbert07/15/12
I loved this poem. Well written and with a great message and word picture!
Myrna Noyes07/16/12
Your delightful poem painted lovely word pictures of the ocean and the beach! We camp at the ocean for a week every summer, so I especially "connected" with your writing in this piece! :)
CD Swanson 07/19/12
Congratulations Lynn! God bless~
Genia Gilbert07/19/12
Congratultions on your placing. Well deserved!
Myrna Noyes07/19/12
Pam Ford Davis 07/20/12
Congratulations Lynn! I can almost hear the surf and feel the sand between my toes...
Wing His Words!
Loren T. Lowery07/25/12
While reading this I sensed a rhythm (or maybe it was a connection) to what was being said to what was being experienced - a sense of peace and thankfulness and contentment. Congratulations - well deserved, indeed!