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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fragrance (10/24/05)

TITLE: Fragrant Memory
By Karen Persson
10/29/05


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The young woman in the park stood a moment admiring the cascading honeysuckle before she closed her eyes and knelt down beside the thickly disguised wall. Filling her lungs with the wonderful fragrance, a memory rushed in…


“Mama, can we take a walk in the park today? I wanna feed the ducks.”

“Hum, well I think I can arrange that, Honey. I’ll tell you what, we will take the detour through the park on the way home from school. We can even have a picnic. I’ll just bring snacks since we won’t be too hungry at that hour of the day. We can stay as long as you’d like because Papa won’t be home until later today.”

“Oh, that’s wonderful! I’m looking so forward to it. How will I last through school?”

“You will, Dear. Just keep your mind on your studies and your heart set on the goal. Come on now, we have to get you to school or you’ll be late.”



“Thank you, Mama. I had such a wonderful time. You’re the best Mama in the whole wide world. What is that smell? It smells pretty.”

“That’s not a smell, Dear. That is a fragrance. A fragrance is a special sort of smell that comes from something worthy of giving it. It is beautiful isn’t it? Come, I’ll show you where it comes from.”

“Yes, I like how that sounds. I can’t wait to see it and really sniff it in!”

“Look, see there! All that white on the wall up ahead. Isn’t that beautiful?”

“Oh my, Mama! That is wonderful! Hurry, I want to see up close.”



“They look like tiny carriages all dressed up with frilly fringe. If I close my eyes, I can imagine us riding in a giant honeysuckle carriage. The smell…I mean, fragrance is dreamy.”

“Yes, I think so too. God’s perfection is amazing.”



Hanna stood up and opened her eyes. She was thankful for this memory she had of her mother. The simple words her mother spoke to her when she was a child had a purpose beyond the realm of childhood.
Hanna carefully picked a tiny carriage and prayed that the fragrance of Christ would be in her too. She would keep her mind on His purpose and her heart set on the goal.

For we are unto God a sweet savour of Christ, in them that are saved, and in them that perish…
2 Corinthians 2:15 (KJV)


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Jan Ackerson 11/01/05
It's a lovely memory. Add a few descriptive passages to your dialog to "flesh out" the story a bit and to help put your readers in there with your main character. Good writing!
terri tiffany11/01/05
Very nice! I enjoyed reading it all:)
dub W11/01/05
Very nice read. You might add a little support to the dialog, called beats - helps with the descriptions.
Nina Phillips11/02/05
I liked the memory circling back around with the honeysuckle and the carriage. Nice writing. God bless ya, littlelight