The Official Writing Challenge
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06/18/12
Great thoughts - and a powerful reminder.
This is a creative take on the topic. I really enjoyed your POV and found it quite compelling. I was eager to keep reading.

You may want to make smaller paragraphs and double space them to give the reader that all important white space. Also make sure you write out numbers one to ten (some say to a hundred but I think ten is fine) I noticed you did write it out in the story but not in the title.

These are tiny little details. The heart of your message was straight on topic. You did a fantastic job of making me see something from a different perspective and I think that is talented writing.
Really good piece.

I'm not sure how to pass this along any other way as I'm a newbie here...so...

Thank you very much for all of the encouraging words and constructive criticism.

I really do appreciate the fact that you not only read the article but also left a comment and/or suggestions.

Many thanks and God bless!
RuthAnn.
06/20/12
Creative story and nice job with this piece. I enjoyed the entire entry. Good message and good job overall!

Thank you. God bless~