The Official Writing Challenge
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You write lovely descriptions! I loved your first sentence with 'fragile sparrows'. A few errors in words...'all five act' and Quiet should be quietly? Watch your punctuation. I think your strength is in the way you describe something.I envy that! Keep are very good.
Your description is like the lotion, a very beautiful and smooth offering. Watch tense shifts and punctuation; otherwise a wonderful entry.
I really liked this beautiful story. The care, and the response to the rose fragrant lotion. Good idea also..I enjoy those types of things. I could imagine the response would be exactly as you described. God bless ya, littlelight
this brought tears to my eyes. God bless you for writing and sharing this..
Loved the recurring theme of the lotion. Very gentle writing.
This is a heartwarming story!
Beautiful - so many wonderful things - this was one of my favorites "cool mottled lacey shadows of a majestic tree"
You definitely have a writing gift, so keep entering! If you can, get Word, do, as it will clean up all of your grammar, punctuation, spelling etc. mistakes. The mistakes take the reader away slightly from being able to enjoy the story in the way it deserves.