The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/12
The story line you chose was quite unique. I didn't realize until I had almost reached the end of your story who that someone was who loved him so much. There are a couple places where you use the possessive of a word when it should be just singular. I believe a simple spellcheck would have taken care of that. Also, your paragraphs seem to be spaced with more than double spacing. I'm not sure why. Other than that, I think you did an excellent job in telling this story with a little eye-opener at the end. Nicely written on a subject that we unfortunately are seeing way too many incidences of in the news.
06/11/12
Oh... wow. That's about all I have to say. This was SO good, and riviting. I knew right away who had written the letter, but it didn't damper the effect at all. If anything it enhanced it. Awesome job with this.
06/11/12
Wow. This was really amazing. Even though the story line wasn't very creative (being a teacher I am very much aware of situations like this within schools.)
HOWEVER, the way that you presented the story line is what makes it unique and I applaud you. I fully expect you to be moving up soon.
Oh my gosh, this is good! I loved it!

Connie
06/15/12
Congrats! God Bless~