The Official Writing Challenge
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06/09/12
Yes, underage drinking certainly a "current affair." Your story reminds me of others I've known who did the same thing as your MC did, all in the name of trying to please everyone. I think you did an excellente job in describing the various scenes of your story. If I am correct, you used "pretty" instead of "plenty" at one point which means you need to be just a little more cautious in your proofing. I come from a legal background so I just automatically proof as I read. Other than that, I thought your story line was good and unique.
You have a powerful talent - to be able to evoke passion for your cause from your reader. I felt disgusted like Mrs. Stanton at her husband! haha Technical skills can be honed and developed. But getting a rise out of your readers is a gift and talent. Truly great writers dont have to tell people what to think or feel - their writing makes it happen! Bravo