The Official Writing Challenge
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06/07/12
Pertinent. Powerful. Prolific. Postively on topic. Pretty impressive.

Loved it. Thank you.

God bless~
06/07/12
I stand and applaud you.this was moving, sad and so true. You write of my most heartfelt passions, our children. God Bless you.

Terrific writing.















06/07/12
I agree with everyone that was fantastic. Words so real they just jump out at you and you can literally see life as you wrote it.... keep up the great work
WOW! I have goosebumps. You started off immediately drawing the reader in and I found myself holding my breath.

You have some tiny errors that need polishing because I think once this is polished it needs to be out where as many people as possible can read it. EX: sons violent ways should be son's or sons' violent... you have a typo with silent. The line Carries a gun along with books to school I almost think would flow better without the to school.

You also did a spectacular job of coming full circle with this stunning bit of poetry. It's a winner in my book for sure.