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TITLE: The Answer to my Life | Previous Challenge Entry
By debra little
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The thoughts in my mind, hurts that run deep.
Somethings only God can heal.
I find myself sitting and crying beside a grave.
My moms, a long eighteen years gone by.
Talking to her, every memory gone before me as I sit there I try to save
Why does the pain envelope you so tightly and why does not time heal?
Every moment of every day the loss, the pain of death, seems so surreal.
Our God created us to be born and then to die.
Why can't someone just simply tell me Why?
I have never understood death, but I know there is another side
The side of heaven "Glory built on High"
Can you answer the Question?
Revelation 21:1-4 "Then I saw a new heaven and a new earth, for the first heaven and the first earth had passed away, and the sea was no more. And I saw the holy city, new Jerusalem, coming down out of heaven from God, prepared as a bride adorned for her husband. And I heard a loud voice from the throne saying, “Behold, the dwelling place of God is with man. He will dwell with them, and they will be his people, and God himself will be with them as their God. He will wipe away every tear from their eyes, and death shall be no more, neither shall there be mourning, nor crying, nor pain anymore, for the former things have passed away."
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You may want to expand it a bit more. Perhaps give one or two possible answers for your questions, things the reader may not have thought of. Just from curiosity I wanted to see how many words were written by you --128 and how many from the Bible verse --124 I did that just to help you see that half of your work came right from the Bible. Don't get me wrong, there is nothing amiss by using scriptures but in a setting such as this you want to encourage your reader to think in a new way or think deeper than they had before. The Bible is the best start but both you and the reader will gain so much more when you are able to step out of your comfort zone and share even more with the reader.
The first line is quite thought-provoking. Time does change how one feels and how one heals. I wonder why siblings who both lost their mother can grieve in such different ways. When my mom died I remember my sister telling me to get over it already! She was able to move on but not I. Why?
You also gave me goosebumps when you mentioned it has been a long 18 years since your mother passed away. That is how long it has been for me as well. You have some great inspiration here.